英语作文-moviegoing（去电影院看电影的好处）

Paragraph Writing Paragraph Writing The Hazards of Moviegoing freewriting I really find it annoying to go see movies anymore. Even though I love films, traffic to Cinema Six is awful. I hate looking for a parking place, the lot isn’t big enough for the theaters and other stores. You just keep driving to find a parking space and hoping someone will pull out and no one else will pull in ahead of you. Then you don’t want there to be a long line and to wind up in one of the first rows with this huge screen right in front of you. Then I’m in the theater with the smell of popcorn all around. Sitting there selling it trying to ignore it and just wanting to pour a whole bucket of popcorn with melted butter down my throat. I can’t stop thinking about the chocolate bars either. I love the stuff but I don’t need it. The people who are there sometimes drive me nuts. Talking and laughing, kids running around, packs of teens hollering, who can listen to the movie? And I might run into my old boyfriend – the last thing I need. Also sitting through all the previews and commercials. If I arrive late enough to miss that junk the movie may be selled out. Revised draft Although I love movies, I’ve found that there are drawbacks to moviegoing. One problem is just the inconvenience of it all. To get to the theater, I have to drive for at least fifteen minutes, or more if traffic is bad. It can take forever to find a parking spot, and then I have to walk across a huge parking lot to the theater. There I encounter long lines, sold-out shows, and ever-increasing prices. And I hate sitting with my feet stuck to the floor because of other people’s spilled snacks. Another problem is my lack of self-control at the theater. I often stuff myself with unhealthy calorie-laden snacks. My choices might include a bucket of popcorn, a box of Milk Duds, a giant soda, or all three. The worst problem is some of the other moviegoers. Kids run up and down the aisle. Teenagers laugh and shout at the screen. People of all ages drop soda cups and popcorn tubs, cough and burp, and talk to one another. All in all, I would rather stay home and wait to see the latest movie hits on cable TV in the comfort of my own living room. (200 words) Essay Writing First draft Even though I love movie, my friends have stopped asking me to go. There are just too many problems involved in going to the movies There are no small theaters anymore, I have to drive fifteen minutes to a big multiplex. Because of a supermarket and restaurants, the parking lot is filled. I have to keep driving around to find a space. Then I have to stand in a long line. Hoping that they do not run out of tickets. Finally, I have to pay too much money for a ticket. Putting out that much money, I should not have to deal with a floor that seems coated with rubber cement. By the end of a movie, my shoes are often sealed to a mix of spilled soda, bubble gun, and other stuff. The theater offers temptations in the form of snacks I really don’t need. Like most of us I have to worry about weight gain. At home I do pretty well by simply watching what I keep in the house and not buying stuff that is bad for me. I can make do with healthy snacks because there is nothing in the house. Going to the theater is like spending my evening in a market that’s been equipped with a movie screen and there are seats which are comfortable. I try to persuade myself to just have a diet soda. The smell of popcorn soon overcomes me. My friends are as bad as I am. Chocolate bars seem to jump into your hands, I am eating enormous mouthfuls of milk duds. By the time I leave the theater I feel sick and tired of myself. Some of the other moviegoers are the worst problem. There are teenagers who try to impress their friends in one way or another. Little kids race up and down the aisles, giggling and laughing. Adults act as if they’re watching the movie at home. They talk loudly about the ages of the stars and give away the plot. Other people are dropping popcorn tubs or cups of crushed ice and soda on the floor. Also coughing a lot and doing other stuff. I decided one night that I was not going to be a moviegoer anymore. I joined a local video store, and I’ll watch movies comfortable in my own living room. (390 words) Revised draft The Hazards of Moviegoing I am a movie fanatic. My friends count on me to know movie trivia (who was the pigtailed little girl in E.T.: The Extra-terrestrial? Drew Barrymore) and to remember every big Oscar awarded since I was in grade school (best picture 1994? Forrest Gump). My friends, though, have stopped asking me if I want to go out to the movies. While I love movies as much as ever, the inconvenience of going out, the temptations of the theater, and the behavior of some patrons are reasons for me to wait and rent the video. To begin with, I just don’t enjoy the general hassle of the evening. Since small local movie theaters are a thing of the past, I have to drive for fifteen minutes to get to the nearest multiplex. The parking lot is shared with several restaurants and s supermarket, so it’s always jammed. I have to drive around at a snail’s pace until I spot another driver backing out. Then it’s time to stand in an endless line, with the constant threat that tickets for the show I want will sell out. If we do get tickets, the theater will be so crowded that I won’t be able to sit with my friends, or we’ll have to sit in a front row gaping up at a giant screen. I have to shell out a ridiculous amount of money – up to $8 – for a ticket. That entitles me to sit while my shoes seal themselves to a sticky floor coated with spilled soda, bubble gum, and crushed Raisinets. Second, the theater offers tempting snacks that I really don’t need. Like most of us, I have to battle an expanding waistline. At home I do pretty well by simply not buying stuff that is bad for me. I can make do with snacks like celery and carrot sticks because there is no ice cream in the freezer. Going to the theater, however, is like spending my evening in a Seven-Eleven that’s been equipped with a movie screen and comfortable seats. As I try to persuade myself to just have a diet Coke, the smell of fresh popcorn dripping with butter soon overcomes me. Chocolate bars the size of small automobiles seem to jump into my hands. I risk pulling out my fillings as I chew enormous mouthfuls of Milk Duds. By the time I leave the theater, I feel disgusted with myself. Many of the other patrons are even more of a problem than the concession stand. Little kids race up and down the aisles, usually in giggling packs. Teenagers try to impress their friends by talking back to the screen, whistling, and making what they consider to be hilarious noises. Adults act as if they were at home in their own living room. They comment loudly on the ages of the stars and reveal plot twists that are supposed to be a secret until the film’s end. And people of all ages create distractions. They crinkle candy wrappers, stick gum on their seats, and drop popcorn tubs or cups of crushed ice and soda on the floor. They also cough and burp, squirm endlessly in their seats, file out for repeated trips to the rest rooms or concession stands, and elbow me out of the armrest on either side of my seat. After arriving home from the movies one night, I decided that I was not going to be a moviegoer anymore. I was tired of the problems involved in getting to the theater, resisting unhealthy snacks, and dealing with the patrons. The next day, I arranged to have premium movie channels installed as part of my cable TV service, and I also got a membership at my local video store. I may now see movies a bit later than other people, but I’ll be more relaxed watching box office hits in the comfort of my own living room. (650 words) 1. In this essay, which sentence or sentences are used to attract the reader’s interest? a. First sentence b. First two sentences c. First three sentences 2. In which sentence is the thesis of the essay presented? a. Third sentence b. Fourth sentence 3. Does the thesis include a plan of development? a. Yes b. No 4. Which two sentences in the concluding paragraph restate the thesis and supporting points of the essay? a. First and second b. Second and third c. Third and fourth 5. Which sentence in the concluding paragraph contains the final thought of the essay? a. Second b. Third c. Fourth SELF-EVALUATION Base 1: Unity • Is there a clear opening statement of the point of the paper? • Does all the material in the paper support the opening point? Base 2: Support • Is there specific evidence? • Is there plenty of it? Base 3: Coherence • Is there a clear method of organization? • Are transitions used to connect sentences and ideas? Base 4: Sentence Skills • Are there any rough spots where the sentences do not flow smoothly and clearly? • Have you checked carefully for mistakes in spelling, grammar, punctuation, or usage?